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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one are of Britain. The police shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisions where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one are of Britain. The police shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The table
repesents
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represents
 the sources of
income
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 for the police budget ,
while
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 the charts
illustrates
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illustrate
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 how the
income
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 was spent in both years which are 2017 and 2018 . In the next
paragraphs
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 I will
further
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 elaborate on the specific data regarding
this
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 subject .
Overall
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 , the major source of
income
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 for the police's budget is from the National Government In both years .
Firstly
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 ,
according to
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 the data that the table
represent
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, the amount of money that came from the Local Taxes had increased by 11.5 million ,
while
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 the other sources of
income
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 had remained
on
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in
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 somewhat the same range in both years.
Secondly
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 , the chart illustrates that the major of total
income
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 was spent on salaries to be
presice
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precise
 in 2017 and 2018 was 75% and 69% respectively .
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Whereas the
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The
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 change in the money spent on technology had increased from 8 % in 2017 to 14% in 2018 which was about the double amount. As for the buildings and transport had been the same .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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