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Writing Samples
Band 8.5

You have heard that the local authority is planning to build a shopping mall in the centre of your town. You do not agree with this decision because there are already a lot of shops. Write a letter to the planning department. In your letter -say why you are writing -give reasons for your objections -explain what you think would be a better alternative

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing a letter to raise my concern regarding a shopping
mall
 which is planning to be built in the city centre.
Thus
, I am extremely disappointed with
this
 decision.
To begin
 with, please note that there are plenty of shops in the centre of the town.
Therefore
, there is no need to construct a new shopping
mall
. I am informing you of
this
 wrong decision as
this
 will create various difficulties for residents and local shop vendors. I am opposed because the city centre area is already congested. Since traffic congestion is the biggest and most routine problem, a new shopping
mall
 will add more issues.
As a result
, people will face difficulties
while
 travelling.
Moreover
, rising traffic will emit gas and it will result in pollution. Rather than planning a new shopping
mall
, I would recommend planning for the central garden in the middle of the town.
This
 will assist people to relax and enjoy in a busy area.
In addition
, green plants and trees will reduce gas emissions and prevent pollution. The local planning department to think seriously about
this
 requirement and plan
accordingly
. I am looking forward to hearing from you and taking the necessary action. Yours faithfully, Rob Steve,
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coherence cohesion
Make sure to proofread your letter for minor grammatical and punctuation errors.
task achievement
While your objections are clear, you could further elaborate on how these issues specifically affect daily life in more detail.
coherence cohesion
Your letter has a clear and logical structure, making it easy to follow your arguments.
task achievement
You used a suitable and polite writing tone throughout the letter.
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