Some people are of the opinion that children should be rewarded for good behaviour. Others think they should be punished for bad behavior. Discuss both views and give your personal opinion and reasons.
Part of
the
society Correct article usage
apply
believe
that kids should Change the verb form
believes
be punish
when they misbehave. Change the verb form
be punished
Nevertheless
, I think that better
option is that kids get a gift when they do a good thing, because they will love to do that good thing again.
On the first hand, it seems to me that when children should Correct article usage
the better
be punish
when they do a bad thing is a bad idea, Change the verb form
be punished
due to
the fact that he is just in
a small age and Change preposition
apply
he
don't know the Correct pronoun usage
they
different
between the right and the wrong hance, he Replace the word
difference
need
his parent to teach him the difference between them. For a clear example, if the mother or the father Change the verb form
needs
punshed
Correct your spelling
punishes
him
son and Correct pronoun usage
his
do
not tell them the reason or he Correct subject-verb agreement
does
do
not understand what the bad thing Change the verb form
does
has
he did he will Unnecessary verb
apply
going to
hate himself and Verb problem
apply
also
his parent.
On the other hand
, children should be rewarded when they behaved
Wrong verb form
behave
good
, Change the word
well
due to
the fact that they will understand and know that what they were
doing is a nice thing. Wrong verb form
are
Moreover
, they will going
to be extremely Change the verb form
go
be going
excaited
to behave Correct your spelling
excited
good
and do good things. Change the word
well
Also
Add a comma
Also,
this
when Correct pronoun usage
apply
this
child grows up he will be a secssful
person.
In conclusion, Correct your spelling
successful
this
essay discussed that children should get rewarded when they behave good
and the other view if they should be punished when they misbehave and that was the better view to me. Many people need more information about Change the word
well
this
topic. It is better to exchange our experiences about this
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