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The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000

The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of
men
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 and
women
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 from four
nations
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Australia
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,
Japan
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, the USA, and
Belgium
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 worked between 1970 to 2000.
Overall
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, in
Japan
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,
men
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 worked more than
women
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 and in the United
States
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 of
America
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 was on lowest in the
men
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's category.
On the other hand
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,
women
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 in
Japan
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 showed more interest in employment as compared to
Belgium
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, which was the lowest among all
nations
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. It is conspicuous that
Japan
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's
men
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 worked 84% in the
year
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 1970.
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,
Belgium
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 was second in the same
year
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 about 79%.
Australia
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 and the USA were respectively 74% and 73% in 1970.
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, looking at the
year
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 2000,
Japan
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 again 76% in the
year
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 2000, which is highest among the all
nations
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. The United
States
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 of
America
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 was at 55% in 2000.
In addition
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,
Australia
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 and
Belgium
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 were 47% and 19% respectively in 2000. Probing ahead,
Japan
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's
women
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 showed more interest in employment at 43% in the
year
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 1970 and the United
States
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 of
America
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 was at 36% in the same
year
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. In the case of
Australia
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 and
Belgium
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, they were 18% and 8% in 1970. It can be experienced in the
year
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 2000,
women
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 in
Japan
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 were 40% highest among all other
nations
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. The United
States
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 of
America
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 was in second position, which was 38% of female workers working in 2000.
Australia
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 and
Belgium
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 were at 19% and 7% in 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, nations, australia, japan, belgium, states, america, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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