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The graph shows the population of india and china from year 2000 to the present day with projection for grownth to the year 2050

The graph shows the population of india and china from year 2000 to the present day with projection for grownth to the year 2050
#population #india #china #year #projection #grownth
The given chart illustrates
predicted
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 growing
population
 of
two
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the two
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 greatest countries
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that is
 India and China from 2000 to 2050.
Overall
, despite China's higher
number of
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population
 at the starting point, interestingly, experts predicted that Indian citizens will increase dramatically,
moreover
, it will reach a higher point than China. Regarding Chinese citizens, originally, China’s government reported that they had the highest
number of
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population
 with 1,250
billion
people
.
However
, it will go up slightly until
in
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2030(1,450
billion
people
) and the prediction says that it will decline remarkably.
In contrast
,
although
 India started from approximately only 1,000
billion
people
 in 2000, it
have
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 increased dramatically and will be
the
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 same position
with
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as
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Chinese
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the Chinese
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population
 in 2030(1,450
billion
people
) and it will rise more without
stop
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stopping
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, billion, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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