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Many companies and other organizations require employees to wear a uniform. For which jobs do you think a uniform is a good thing? What are the disadvantages of having to wear a uniform at work?

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In the manufacturing
process
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, delivery of
product
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products
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 from the production site to the market is challenging, especially when the goods need to be transported across
countries
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.
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,
this
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process
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 is essential since not every
country
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could
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 fulfil their needs and should depend on
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apply
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other
countries
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. Exporting
products
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 to other
countries
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 could benefit the
country
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's income or GDP (gross domestic product). As an indicator of national growth, increasing GDP will generate prosperity for the nation and ultimately for the citizens. On the other side, importing
products
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 from other
countries
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 will satisfy the consumers, particularly for the things that are insufficiently produced within the
country
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.
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, the activity of importing and exporting stuff across
countries
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 is actually a mutual
process
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 that not only benefits the market but
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 strengthens the relationship between
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.
Although
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 the
process
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 of import and export will help the daily needs between
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, knowing the limit is necessary to prevent negative impacts.
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, excessive imports will eventually prevent the growth of local
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.
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, too much export, especially natural
products
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 could deplete the
country
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's resources.
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task achievement
Try to develop your ideas more fully by including examples. Doing so will add depth to your arguments and make your points clearer.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. Although your essay has a clear structure, the flow can be improved with better transition sentences.
introduction conclusion present
Your essay has a clear introduction that outlines the main points effectively, which sets a good stage for your discussion.
clear comprehensive ideas
Your discussion about the mutual benefits of importing and exporting is well-articulated and shows a good understanding of the economic principles involved.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cohesive brand image
  • promote discipline
  • enhanced professionalism
  • self-expression
  • standardization
  • identification
  • hygiene
  • cost of maintaining
  • employee morale
  • industry regulations
  • safety features
  • impersonal atmosphere
  • congenial work environment
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