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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided
percentage
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 table illustrates the data related to how unemployed
men
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 and
women
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 spent their time a year ago in the UK.
Overall
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, a glance at the graph reveals that in the morning the majority of
women
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 did
housework
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,
while
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men
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 searched for a job. The minority of
women
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 played sports and drank,
whereas
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men
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 did nothing and drank. In the afternoon
women
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 preferred to do
housework
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, shopping and visit friends,
while
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men
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 watched TV and did gardening. None of the
women
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 stayed in bed and played sports. Now, turning to the details, in the morning a large number of
women
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 did
housework
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, 49%. An approximately equal
percentage
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 of
women
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 and
men
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 did shopping (26% and 20%, respectively) and did nothing or were drinking.
According to
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 the data, the maximum
percentage
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 of
women
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 in the afternoon, 21%, reflected
housework
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,
while
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 the minimum, 1%, applied to drinking. An equal
percentage
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 of
men
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 searched for a job and visited friends (12% and 12%, respectively).

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, men, women, housework with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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