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The bar graph below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six computer science subjects at a US university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six computer science subjects at a US university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar graph illustrates the data about how many research
student
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 divided by gender studied six different computer science-related subjects at an American university in 2011.
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, what stands out from the chart is that in the majority of the topics, except for
linguistics
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 and natural sciences, male students, though to different degrees, outnumbered female ones.
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, natural sciences were the most popular course among both genders,
whereas
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 mathematics and
linguistics
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 had the least
number
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 of female and male participants, respectively. Regarding those subjects in which men had higher attendance, they can be
further
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 divided into
two
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 subgroups based on the degree of discrepancies between the
two
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 genders’ numbers. The first one consisted of mathematics, programming, and engineering, the
number
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 of attending men was significantly higher than their opposite-sex counterparts with females composing a spectrum consisting of only one-fifth to half of the men's population. In The second subgroup which encompasses psychology,
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, the gap between the numbers of students of different genders was about 50 people and
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 was less significant than the previous subgroup. Shortly,
although
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 in three topics the variations between the
two
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 sexes were considerable, in one field it was minor.
In contrast
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, there are
two
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 subjects including
linguistics
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 and natural sciences in which the
number
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 of females either exceeds or equals the males’
number
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. Regarding
linguistics
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, it can be understood that the
number
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 of males is almost the same as the
number
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 of women who studied engineering.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words linguistics, number, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "divided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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