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The graph below shows the daily consumption of three spreads per person from 1981 to 2007 in a country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the daily consumption of three spreads per person from 1981 to 2007 in a country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 graph illustrates some data related to the consumption of spreads within a time span of 26 years (between 1981 and 2007). Three various spreads are being compared.
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, a glance at the graph reveals the dramatic decrease connected with margarine and butter,
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 low fat and reduced spreads witnessed
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significant growth during the period of 11 years. Now, turning to the details, with regards to the consumption of butter, the maximum quantity of
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, approximately 160, reflected 1986,
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 the minimum amount, roughly 50, applied to 2007. The margarine saw a slight decline from 1981 to 1986,
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 gradual increase (from 80 to 100
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). By the end of the
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 it declined considerably by 60
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 it increased dramatically by approximately 70
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 and decreased to around 70. An approximately equal amount of margarine and butter, 100
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, was evident in 1991.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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