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The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate the percentage of
movies
 produced and
compared
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compare
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 it with the percentage of tickets
boughts
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bought
 between 1996 and 2006 in a nation.
Overall
, there was a dramatic
rose
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rise
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 in the percentage of
daram
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dream
films
 produced
while
 the
highst
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highest
 number of ticket sales
in
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for
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 comedy
movies
. there was a significant
decreased
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decrease
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 in romance
movies
in
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apply
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both
producted
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products
 and bought. The
amount
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number
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 of
movies
 released
were
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was
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 higher in 2006 than in 1996. Drama
were
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was
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higher
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a higher
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 kind of
films
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film
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 produced it was around 25% in 1996
then
 increased to 35%.
In contrast
 , romance
were
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was
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 the least
films
 around 5%. The
pecentage
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percentage
 of
movies
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movie
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tickes
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tickets
 bought was highest in 2006. People
prefered
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preferred
 to watch comedy
films
 it
strated
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started
 at 20%
then
 had increased to just under 25% by 2006.
while
 the least
movies
 were fantasy under 5% in 1996 and romance 5% in 2006
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words movies, films with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • depict
  • significant increases/decreases
  • highlighting
  • drawing comparisons
  • discrepancies
  • notable trends
  • unexpected findings
  • anomalies
  • phenomenon
  • emphasizing
  • evolution
  • implications
  • producers
  • distributors
  • audiences
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