The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts illustrate the percentage of
movies
produced and Use synonyms
compared
it with the percentage of tickets Wrong verb form
compare
boughts
between 1996 and 2006 in a nation.
Correct your spelling
bought
Overall
, there was a dramatic Linking Words
rose
in the percentage of Correct your spelling
rise
daram
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dream
films
produced Use synonyms
while
the Linking Words
highst
number of ticket sales Correct your spelling
highest
in
comedy Change preposition
for
movies
. there was a significant Use synonyms
decreased
in romance Replace the word
decrease
movies
Use synonyms
in
both Change preposition
apply
producted
and bought.
The Correct your spelling
products
amount
of Change the quantifier
number
movies
released Use synonyms
were
higher in 2006 than in 1996. Drama Correct subject-verb agreement
was
were
Change the verb form
was
higher
kind of Correct article usage
a higher
Use synonyms
films
produced it was around 25% in 1996 Fix the agreement mistake
film
then
increased to 35%. Linking Words
In contrast
, romance Linking Words
were
the least Change the verb form
was
films
around 5%.
The Use synonyms
pecentage
of Correct your spelling
percentage
Use synonyms
movies
Fix the agreement mistake
movie
tickes
bought was highest in 2006. People Correct your spelling
tickets
prefered
to watch comedy Correct your spelling
preferred
films
it Use synonyms
strated
at 20% Correct your spelling
started
then
had increased to just under 25% by 2006. Linking Words
while
the least Linking Words
movies
were fantasy under 5% in 1996 and romance 5% in 2006Use synonyms
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words movies, films with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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