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Some people believe that the internet has positive effect , others think that It has negative trends .Discuss both views and give your opinion .

#people #internet #effect #trends
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implementation
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the implementation
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 of the
internet
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 has
a
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had a
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great impact on
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people
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people's
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 lives. Some people believe that
internet
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the internet
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 has
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a favorable
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favorable
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favourable
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 effect
while
 some argue and consider it
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unfavourable
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. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both perspectives and express my opinion.
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 the one hand,
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the insertion
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 of the
internet
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 in countries has a huge trail on
residents
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residents'
resident's
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live
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.
Furthermore
, it
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contributes
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 to
improve
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 the education quality and
ability
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the ability
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 to grasp
the
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knowledge more easily.
For example
,
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inserting
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 the
internet
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 in schools has assisted teachers greatly
on make
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in making
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 interactive classes.
However
, it helps
of
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many students who learn foreign
language
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languages
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 to practice, enhance their languages and
broadening
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broaden
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 their
horizon
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horizons
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.
On the other hand
, the presence of the
internet
 has various disadvantages, misuse of it can lead to
break
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breaking
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 their values and their principles.
This
internet
 could distract our social lives and relationships.
For instance
, those who
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are
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of
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to
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 the
internet
they
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apply
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often
losing
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lose
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 their skills
on make
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in making
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a
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new friends and new relations because they
used
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use
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 to contact their electronic peers beyond the screen.
And the
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 great influence of using
internet
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the internet
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 is some of them
loss
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lose
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 their reading habit and
practicing
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practice
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 their hobbies in much of
society’s
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societies
society
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. In conclusion, I fully agree with how the
internet
 is useful and
raise of
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encourages
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 nations
on
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to
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 learn of variety sorts of sciences and contact
with
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apply
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your
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their
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 family from
along
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a long
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 distance.
While some
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Some
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 of
this
 harm
is make
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is made
is making
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 the world
is
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busy with their mobile phones and
keep
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keeping
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 them away from
the
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reality.
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task achievement
Try to use more varied vocabulary to make your writing more engaging and less repetitive. Avoid simple mistakes such as missing articles and subject-verb agreement errors.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your paragraphs are well-organized and each one discusses only one main idea. Avoid including unrelated points in the same paragraph.
introduction conclusion present
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in framing the discussion effectively.
complete response
The writer has made an effort to address both perspectives of the issue, which is essential for a balanced argument.
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