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Many people believe that educational standards have declined in recent times, particularly in the area of literacy and numeracy. Discuss the problem and give solutions ?

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Nowadays, some individuals think there is a reduction in the status of education especially in the aspects of literacy and calculation.
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 some
problems
 associated with
this
 decline and tentative suggestions to curtail
this
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To begin
 with, Mathematics is a subject known to sharpen the thinking ability of people,
as well as
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 lifetime
problems
 technically.
However
, the invention of calculators makes carrying out arithmetics very easy and fast.
This
 has led to people resorting to its
use
instead
 of racking their brains to solve very simple arithmetic questions. By so doing, people are robbed of their ability to carry out simple calculations with their minds. The resultant effect is having lots of adults who struggle with carrying out everyday
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such
 as the
use
 of money. To add to
this
, there are
on-line
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 applications where a
google
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 voice does reading.
Such
 applications
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 not encourage students to learn to read. Not learning to read affects speaking the English language which makes communication difficult.
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solutions
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 to these
problems
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 discouraging the
use
 of calculators in school so as to enable pupils
develop
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 their thinking abilities really well.
Also
, children should not be allowed access to
softwares
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software
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 as
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 which will carry out reading for them. They should learn to read at school themselves. In conclusion, the main
problems
 there are to a decline in our educational standards are the
use
 of calculators and
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 services that read for schoolers.
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task achievement
Provide more specific and detailed examples to support your points. This will strengthen the argument and illustrate a clearer understanding of the issue.
coherence cohesion
Work on developing paragraphs more fully by adding transitions between your ideas. This will help improve the logical structure and the flow of the essay.
supported main points
Enhance the depth of your explanations and ensure each point is thoroughly supported. Avoid general statements by providing concrete evidence or illustrative cases.
introduction conclusion present
Good introduction and conclusion that clearly outline the topic and provide a sense of closure.
task achievement
The essay addresses problems and solutions directly related to the topic, such as technology's impact on literacy and numeracy.
logical structure
Adequate paragraphing helps in separating different ideas, making the essay easier to read.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic performance
  • standardized testing
  • educational attainment
  • pedagogical methods
  • curriculum design
  • digital literacy
  • teacher training
  • student engagement
  • educational resources
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • parental involvement
  • education policy
  • learning outcomes
  • formative assessment
  • classroom environment
  • supportive learning
  • baseline skills
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