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The charts below show the proportion of students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportion of students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
The pie charts illustrate the
percentage
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 of
students
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 at a particular university in England who were able to speak other languages
besides
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 English in the years 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, the proportion of the
students
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 who were fluent in Spanish only, another
language
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 and two other languages increased.
However
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, there was a decline in the
percentage
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 of
students
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 who could speak French only and no other
language
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.
To begin
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 with, the figure for the Spanish only saw an increase of 5% between 2000 and 2010.
Similarly
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, the proportion of
students
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 who were able to speak another
language
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 rose from 15% to 20% in the subsequent ten years.
Moreover
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, the
percentage
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 of the two other
language
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 speakers was 10% in 2000,
whereas
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, it saw an increase to 15% in 2010.
In addition
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, the figure for
students
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 who knew French only and no other
language
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 dropped by 5% and 10% respectively in 2010. It is worth noting that the
percentage
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 of
students
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 who could speak only in German levelled out at 10% in both years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, students, language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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