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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram provides information about the improvement of the countryside
as well as
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 the number of human beings in England
were
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constantly rose
up
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during the mid-year of the 19th century. In overview,
Chorleywood
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the Chorleywood
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 area developed during the year
of
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1868 up to 1994 with the construction of infrastructure and the
increasement
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increase
 of the population.
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 with, in the year 1868, the society was very small and the main roads were already constructed,
however
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, in 1883, the state started to
grew
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 up where they built many different housing surrounding a
round about
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, motorway
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 railway line.
Futhermore
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,
motorway
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the motorway
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 was introduced in the year
of
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1970,
this
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 was because of the growth of the community so
the
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 tried to minimise the congestion.
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, in 1922, apartments were constructed along the rails which
was
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 built in 1909,
this
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 clearly shows that there was a great development since they started with roads until they reached their climax of managing to introduce a railway line with a busy train station.
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, a park and golf course was located at the centre of Chorleywood village in the UK.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population growth
  • geographical features
  • 19th century
  • construction
  • public buildings
  • railways
  • infrastructure
  • economic activities
  • housing developments
  • commercial zones
  • environmental concerns
  • deforestation
  • traffic
  • urban sprawl
  • notable architecture
  • landmarks
  • urbanization
  • expansion
  • modernization
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