Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram provides information about the improvement of the countryside
as well as
the number of human beings in England
were
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constantly rose
up
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during the mid-year of the 19th century. In overview,
Chorleywood
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the Chorleywood
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area developed during the year
of
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1868 up to 1994 with the construction of infrastructure and the
increasement
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increase
of the population.
To begin
with, in the year 1868, the society was very small and the main roads were already constructed,
however
, in 1883, the state started to
grew
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up where they built many different housing surrounding a
round about
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, motorway
as well as
railway line.
Futhermore
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,
motorway
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the motorway
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was introduced in the year
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1970,
this
was because of the growth of the community so
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tried to minimise the congestion.
Moreover
, in 1922, apartments were constructed along the rails which
was
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built in 1909,
this
clearly shows that there was a great development since they started with roads until they reached their climax of managing to introduce a railway line with a busy train station.
Lastly
, a park and golf course was located at the centre of Chorleywood village in the UK.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population growth
  • geographical features
  • 19th century
  • construction
  • public buildings
  • railways
  • infrastructure
  • economic activities
  • housing developments
  • commercial zones
  • environmental concerns
  • deforestation
  • traffic
  • urban sprawl
  • notable architecture
  • landmarks
  • urbanization
  • expansion
  • modernization
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