The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of people in Uk in 2004
The bar graph illustrates the spending on three different categories which are food and drink, restaurant and hotel, and entertainment among five different
age
groups
of residents in the UK in 2004.
Overall
, while
expenditure categories of people under 60 years of age
were evenly distributed and included a significant percentage of spending on entertainment, the older generation's spending was more unevenly distributed.
At first,
the expenditure on ‘restaurant
and Fix the agreement mistake
restaurants
hotel
’ steadily Fix the agreement mistake
hotels
decrease
as getting older. Correct subject-verb agreement
decreases
Moreover
, it is interesting that this
percentage is less than 15 % in every age
group
, while
ages 61 and 75 groups
have the lowest figures, approximately 2%.
It is noteworthy that the food and drink spending reported less quantity in the under 30 age
group
, while
other groups
reported the first expenditure except for the 61 and 75 age
groups
. Only two groups
show significant changes in spending, recorded at over 20%. Those are the entertainment spending in the 61-75 age
group
and 'food and drink' spending in the over 76 age
group
.Submitted by kopopig on
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