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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of eports in compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of eports in compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
#value #country #exports #categories #percentage #change #category #eports #summarise #information #features #comparisons #relevent
In the
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 bar graph, displays the nation's
earning
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earnings
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 in the five different categories in the shipment
for
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apply
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abroad in
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the year
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year
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years
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 2015 and 2016. In overview, petroleum
product
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products
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 increased gradually
3
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by 3
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% in 2016, which was the
least
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 percentage of grossing after the agriculture
products
 in comparison of all sections. Meanwhile, the textile
products
accelerate
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 with 15.24% of
sellings
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selling
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 in a
year
that
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which
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 was the highest bounce back amongst all the
products
. In 2015 and 2016,
the
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apply
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petoleum
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petroleum
products
 and engineered goods
was
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were
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 the highest
contributers
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contributors
contributor
 in export, roughly,
sum
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the sum
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 of both categories
add
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added
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 more than 50% of the selling
that is
 100 billion dollars. Other than that, gems and jewellery contribute as the third highest selling sector
that is
upto
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up to
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 40 billion
although
, in next
year
 it retard by 5.18%.
Likewise
, the other two compartments are minor participants
of
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sells
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sales
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that is
 farming
products
 and cloth division.
Moreover
, agronomy goods grow trading by 0.81% but,
fabric
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the fabric
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 segment
accelerate
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transaction
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transactions
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 by 15.24% in
second
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 term which is the highest development amid other
categorization
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categorizations
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. In conclusion, every group expanded their deals except gems and jewellery. Meanwhile, fuel
products
 and scheme goods were the largest contributors and
clothing
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the clothing
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 department
have
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had
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 the highest improvement in a
year
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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