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Some people believe that it is better language students in small classes. Others think the number of people in the classes doesn't matter Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #language #students #classes #doesn #matter
Nowadays, it is widely argued that
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 on sufficiency of the lesson and how well
students
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 them.
However
other
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others
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 believe that the
size
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 doesn't play
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 role and depends only on
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the level
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quality
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 of
language
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teacher
. In point of
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view,
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 the amount of
language
students
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class
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significant
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a significant
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 role. In
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discuss
 whether the
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an impact
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impacted
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 the
level
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students
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 or not.
To begin
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 opinion
that
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is that
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 small
classes
 tend to have better
language
students
. The first convenient reason is that in small
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classes
class
 the
teacher
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 portion of
time
 to each student, which is
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a vital
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 factor
to learn
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in learning
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language
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a language
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 sufficiently, specifically for
students
.
Because in
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students
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misunderstandings
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misunderstanding
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misunderstandings
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 and mistakes
while
 they study
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language
, so
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that
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it is vital
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to
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for
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teacher
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the teacher
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 to pay attention to
each
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 single pupil,
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and correct
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correct
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 and assist them. The second credible reason why some people consider that foreign
language
classes
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than 13
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students
is
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 better is that
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save
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 a
load
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lot
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 of
time
to
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 everyone from
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the principal
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 to learners because the
teacher
 will not be forced to lecture a big
clasess
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class
 which in major
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situations
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ask
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 a lot of questions and they tend to misbehave which make
class
 chaos and
teacher
 of
language
 will spend main of his
time
 to establish order in
class
. On another hand, the number of
students
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the effectiveness
to learn
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of learning
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language
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the language
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 to
certain
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 extent.
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 reason is that it depends solely on the
level
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students
,
while
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 really keen on learning will take
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in
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 the first bench of
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class
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 and listen to
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the teacher
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teacher
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 attentively, others may chat and get distracted.
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students
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 and put effort
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study
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foreign
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a foreign
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language
 will have as same
level
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language
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students
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classes
. In
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conclusion,
although
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a few
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size
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classes
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a tremendous
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. But in most
cases
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 it does matter and
have
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enormous
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an enormous
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 impact on the
level
 of getting and learning foreign
language
 to the
students
 because of the factors
such
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fact
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 that it does not consume as much
time
 to establish order as in big
clasess
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classes
.
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grammar
Ensure to proofread your essay to correct spelling and grammatical mistakes. For instance, 'dicsuss' should be 'discuss' and 'clasess' should be 'classes.'
style
Work on structuring your sentences to avoid redundancy and make them clear and concise. For example, instead of saying, 'that saves a load of time to everyone from principal to learners,' you could say, 'saves time for both teachers and students.'
content
Expand on your examples and make them more specific to strengthen your arguments. Instead of just stating that smaller classes save time, you could explain how this extra time could be used effectively for more personalized teaching.
structure
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which frame your discussion well.
content
You addressed both viewpoints on the topic and provided your own opinion, fulfilling the task requirements.
content
You included relevant points to support each side of the argument, such as the importance of individual attention in smaller classes.

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