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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people taking holidays at home, abroad or both or no holidays for the year 2014 and 2015

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people taking holidays at home, abroad or both or no holidays for the year 2014 and 2015
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The bar chart compares the proportion of Britons and how they spent their holidays, specifically domestic, foreign,
a
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or a
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combination of the two or none, during 2014 and 2015.
Overall
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, it was popular for
British
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people
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 to go
for
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on
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 vacation inside and outside Britain, followed by UK-only
travels
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travel
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 and no holidays.
In contrast
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, travelling abroad for
holiday
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a holiday
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 is the least popular option. In terms of the most popular vacation locale, more than 40% of
British
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people
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 chose to travel both inside the UK and abroad in 2014 and 2015. Meanwhile, travelling abroad experienced the opposite trend with only 12% in 2014 before rising a negligible proportion in 2015. In 2014, there were 20% of
British
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people
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who
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apply
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chose not to spend their holiday and after a one-year period, grew by nearly 2%. Contrastingly, 27% of
British
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people
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 spent their holiday in the UK only during 2014 yet
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 percentage fell to 22% in 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words british, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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