The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates how the cycle life of
honey
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a honey
the honey
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bee.
Overall
it can clearly be seen that there are six stages of the process which
it
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apply
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takes
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take
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34-36
days
. The life cycle begins with
eggs
and ends with maturity.
To begin
with, the
eggs
of
bee
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a bee
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is expected to hatch in 9-10
days
then
nymphs
come out from the
eggs
.
Subsequently
, it needs five
days
to
grew
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grow
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become
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to become
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the bigger
nymphs
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nymph
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.
Moreover
, the
nymphs
could get bigger in double than before in 7
days
and
days
, respectively.
Beside
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that, the
nymphs
could moult three times as it grows. Regarding the rest stages,
the
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apply
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young adult
of
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apply
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honey bees require four
days
to
get
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reach
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maturity.
Thereafter
, it carries out reproduction that
make
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makes
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female honey bees
can
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apply
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produce one or two
eggs
in
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apply
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every three
days
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words days, eggs, nymphs with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life cycle
  • laying of eggs
  • queen bee
  • hatch into larvae
  • rapid growth
  • develop into pupae
  • significant transformation
  • emergence of the adult bee
  • matures fully
  • cyclical nature
  • colony’s survival
  • reproduction process
  • subsequent generations
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