In recent years , many governments have brought in laws to ban smoking in public places , such as bars, restaurants and offices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with banning smoking in public places.

There

has

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been enforced several laws about

prohibition

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the prohibition

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of smoking

at

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in

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social places by the authority. Personally, I am in

favor

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favour

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of the notion regarding restrictions

of

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on

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smoking and

following

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the following

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paragraph will present my arguments. ​One of the major arguments

of

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for

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this

is that

,

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smoking has

effected

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affected

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tremendously on respiratory diseases.

According to

the statistics, death rates among people increase considerably

due to

hazardous cigarettes and

alcohols

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alcohol

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. The reason

of

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for

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this

, harmful ash reaches the smoker’s lung directly like a toxin and it begins to decay gradually

time

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from time

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by

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to

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time.

As a result

ages above 30 face

with

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apply

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serious illnesses that treatment costs highly expensive and lead to clinical asthma and so on. ​

Secondly

, not only cigarette consumers

,

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but

surrounding

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also surrounding

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people can suffer from its negative consequences.

This

is called

as

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‘’passive smoking’’ in medicine which its ash influences on non-smoker’s

organism

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organisms

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through the air. Unless the government do not pay attention to the individual’s health in terms of smoking , it might decrease numerous

lifes

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lives

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.

Moreover

,the

authority

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authorities

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can not handle

this

issue completely , because smokers can

find

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everywhere. Actually, Not all of them obey

to

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apply

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the rules ,

in

contrast

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they fight against the police. ​

Furthermore

, it is obvious that

,

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not only personal illnesses but

also

their

behaivours

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behaviour

have faced

with

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apply

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unpleasant changes. Smokers feel aggressive against their closed ones

,

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when have work-related problems in spite of talking smoothly with each other. In conclusion, smoking is known to have impacted

on

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both society and individuals’ healthy

lifestyle

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lifestyles

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considerably.

However

,

this

issue is avoidable with strong carefulness and joint attempts by the government

as well as

local people.