The graph below presents the employment patterns in the USA between 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The line chart provides information about the employment types in the United States of America from 1930 to 2010.
Overall
, the
farming, fishing and foresting Correct article usage
apply
begins
increasingly to Wrong verb form
began
decreased
during the period, but Wrong verb form
decrease
in
the other hand Change preposition
on
of
Change preposition
apply
another types
Replace the adjective
another type
other types
which
started decreasingly Correct pronoun usage
apply
steady
Change the word
steadily
on
the same period.
The first type is technical Change preposition
in
in addition
sales and office approximately same increasing slowly between 1930 to 1970 then
move
upward from 1980 to 2010.
Wrong verb form
moving
In
the other hand shows Change preposition
On
dramatically increased
in farming, fishing and foresting for year 1930 until 1960 Replace the word
a dramatic increase
then
decreasing
slightly Wrong verb form
decreases
during
1970 to 2010, Change preposition
from
finally
in the last
type of employment which is industrial a steady line until reaching
1980 Verb problem
apply
then
increasing
slowly to 2010, but other services almost same percentage of technical.Wrong verb form
increased
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