The bar chart shows the data of five portions of fruit and vegetables eaten by children, males and females per day in the UK between 2001 and 2008.

The bar chart shows the data of five portions of fruit and vegetables eaten by children, males and females per day in the UK between 2001 and 2008.
The bar chart illustrates information about the percentage of individuals who consume five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the United Kingdom in the
years
2001 to 2008.
Overall
it can be seen that from starting
year
women had a huge audience to eat
such
kind
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of food as
children
and
men
and it has steadily increased throughout the time period.
Men
and
children
had shown similar patterns of
consuming
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. In the
years
2001 to 2003 the percentage of eating
this
food was steady for
men
over 15 per cent and for
children
it exceeded 10 per cent. For another three
years
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there was a gradual increase in the
men
group after which it slightly declined
last
two
years
. The portion of
children
who consumed fruit and vegetables had
also
a similar
increasing
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and decrease seen only in the
year
2008. Women have always been superior to other groups when it comes to eating fruit and vegetables. Consuming
this
food
become
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more and more throughout the
year
and reached its peak in the
year
of
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2006
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just over
than
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30 per cent. Between the
years
2007 and 2008,
this
group faced small drops, but they still saved their spot
in
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the top.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, year, children, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumption trends
  • Demographics
  • Public health campaigns
  • Per capita
  • Consumption patterns
  • Nutritional intake
  • Statistical analysis
  • Dietary habits
  • Health recommendations
  • Daily servings
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