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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
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The bar chart shows
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 the activity of
top
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the top
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 10 nations regarding consumption and output of electric
powers
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 in 2014. In overview,
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china
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 on top of the world in 2014, in both the section, with 5398
billion
kWh
 production and 5322
billion
kWh
 usage of electric current.
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, the USA were
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on
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 second
position
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Germany and
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Korea ranked
on
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 9th and 10th
placee
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places
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 with less than 600
billion
kWh
 in
develop
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 and
expanse
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. China
were
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 the leading country in terms of both
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categories, later, the United
states
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 had digits around 4000
kWh
electricity
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of electricity
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 in both
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. Surprisingly,
3rd
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position
 which was
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Russia, had a bit lower
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 in comparison
of
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2nd
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the 2nd
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position
that
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than
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US
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the US
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.
Likewise
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position
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Russia, Japan, and
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India had not more
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of production and usage, but,
then
canada
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Canada
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 had a difference of 200
billion
 with
place
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a place
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 on
6th
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the 6th
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 number.
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France, Brazil, Germany and
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Korea had minor individuals with
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 of 480 and 620
billion
kWh
.
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China and the USA are the major producers of voltage and
comsumption
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consumption
.
Similarly
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 nation at 3rd
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 and Korea was
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a
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tenth
position
 with
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the least
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 contribution
amongst
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 the top 10 list.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, kwh, position with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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