The shown bar chart provides data on the total quantity of minutes of telephone calls in the United Kingdom between 1995 and 2002. The calls are divided into three categories and are denoted in billions.

The shown bar chart provides data on the total quantity of minutes of telephone calls in the United Kingdom between 1995 and 2002. The calls are divided into three categories and are denoted in billions.
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The present bar chart compares data about the number of times that people used a telephone in 3 different items (Local, National and international, and mobile) in the UK from 1995 to 2002.
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, the main time was for Local calls
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of cell phones. The number of people who used international and mobile increased
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a period of 7 years.
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the diagram, most of the time British used the telephone for local calls. In the beginning the local had 71
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minutes
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this
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trend rose to 1999, and touched the peak of 90
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minutes
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;
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, local reduced the number of
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was absolutely the same as in 1995.
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, other categories had grown-up situations. National and international in 1995 had 38
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minutes
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these had slight claims. For mobile we can see
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enormous growth, for at the start had 2
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minutes
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, but in 2002 the figures became 46
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minutes
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