ou work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it,
Dear Sir,
I am writing
this
letter to request you, to allow me work
in our main branch Add the particle
to work
around
6 months. Change preposition
for around
Initially
, my name is John Edward and I am
working as a Technical designer in Wrong verb form
have been
this
company, since
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for
last
two years. Correct article usage
the last
Moreover
, I saw our office
notice chart, that informed one well talented
software designer required in main Add a hyphen
well-talented
brach
Correct your spelling
branch
office
to give training to the employees who are working in head office
. Hence
, I request you, to recommend my name in this
task. However
, if I worked in main
Change the article
the main
office
, there
would be possible for my job promotion Correct pronoun usage
it
in
next year.
Change preposition
apply
Furthermore
, I will prepare all my job responsibilities and handover it
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them
to
one of my Change preposition
over to
colleague
, during my absence that colleague will take care. If any queries, kindly contact my Change to a plural noun
colleagues
personel
number and email. Correct your spelling
personal
personnel
Also
, I can available
any time for Add a missing verb
be available
online
meeting.
Add an article
an online
the online
Finally
, as a manger
of Correct your spelling
manager
this
region, kindly consider my profile for this
task. If I get this
oppurtunity
that should be very useful to enhance my Correct your spelling
opportunity
carrer
.
Yours Faithfully,
John EdwardCorrect your spelling
career
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coherence cohesion
While the letter covers the main points, ensure each paragraph focuses clearly on one idea or purpose. For example, separate the request to work in the head office from the explanation of how work will be managed during your absence.
coherence cohesion
Your letter is mostly clear and logically structured. Strengthen it by breaking down complex sentences and ensuring clarity in all parts. For instance, rephrase the first sentence for better readability: 'I am writing to request a six-month assignment to our main branch.'
task achievement
Pay attention to language accuracy. While minor errors don't impact the score significantly, refining expressions and checking for grammatical issues will enhance clarity and professionalism. For instance, 'I will prepare all my job responsibilities' can be improved to 'I will organize and delegate my job responsibilities.'
task achievement
You addressed all parts of the prompt and provided a clear explanation for your request, how your work could be managed in your absence, and asked for assistance. Well done!
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and suitable for a request to a manager, which is appropriate and professional.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a good logical flow overall, which makes it easy to understand the main points.