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The charts below show the figure for work hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main characteristics, and compare with the corresponding ones. The charts below show the figure for work hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main characteristics, and compare with the corresponding ones.

The charts below show the figure for work hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main characteristics, and compare with the corresponding ones. The charts below show the figure for work hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main characteristics, and compare with the corresponding ones.
The bar chart illustrates the working
hours
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 in 4 European countries per week in the year 2002.
To begin
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 with, Sweden had the most employees applying around 80% working 36-40
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. Only about 35% and 25% of
workers
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 worked for 31-35 and 41-45
hours
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.
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, The UK had the most number of
workers
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 that worked more than 50
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 and that percentage reached slightly above 20%.
On the other hand
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, France had a different trend compared to the other European countries. Which represents the highest working
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 of 31-35
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while
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 the other 3 countries had the highest working
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 of between 36-40
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.
In addition
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, Denmark had a slightly smaller percentage of 70% of
workers
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 that work 36-40
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 compared to Sweden.
To conclude
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,
Workers
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 worked for various
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 per week from 1 to more than 50
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 a week, but most of them preferred to work 36-40
hours
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, workers with synonyms.
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