The chart below shows the percentages of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentages of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the details concerning the
propotion
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proportion
promotion
of
household
status in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011. It is
obivously
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obviously
witnessed that the rate of owning their own house increased each year over the period.
Conversely
, rented
household
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households
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showed
a
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overall
descending trend. Upon closer examination of the data, the percentage of rented
household
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households
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were at
the
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23% in 1918 and rose to 33% in 1939. It
then
slightly went down to 31% in 1953 and keep
climb
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with
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a steady pace, and reached its peak in 2001, with 69% respectively. The percentage of
househole
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households
household
in rented soon dropped to 65% in the next recorded year.
On
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the
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contrast, the
propotion
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proportion
of households
in
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owned
were
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was
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at
peak
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its peak
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in 1918, and
then
dipped in 1939,
constinuously
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continuously
with 78% and 68% respectively. The rate
steady
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was steady
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in the
14 year
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period, and kept decreasing.
However
, the decreasing pace slowed down in 1991 and 2001, with 32% and 31% respectively. It
then
gradually climbed to 36% in 2011. After a
thoroughly
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analysis, the trend of
percentage
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the percentage
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of
household
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households
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in
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apply
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rented
are
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is
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in
opposite
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the opposite
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line with househole in owned, which reveals an implication that they might
negatively
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correlated with
the
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each
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other.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words household with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "climb" was used 2 times.

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