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Last Wednesday you flew from London to Vancouver. When you arrived home, you discovered that you had left your hand luggage on the plane.

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Dear Sir/Madam, My name is Nisa and I was on the Singapore Airlines flight from London to Vancouver on the 14th of July and I just realised that I had left my hand luggage on the plane. My seat number was 49J and the luggage brand is Samsonite in the colour Sky Blue with a "Maldives" sticker on the front of it. Did your security ever mention my luggage? If yes, how can I get it back as soon as possible because it contains a very important document. I understand that
this
 was fully my mistake and I do not mind going through a
further
 check regarding
this
. The best way to reach me is through my phone number (0468882705) or my email address [email protected]. Alternatively, I would not mind dropping by the nearest Singapore Airlines office in my city (Melbourne). Your fast reply would be appreciated. Have a great day. Kind regards, Nisa
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language
Consider polishing some words or phrases to enhance clarity and formality. For example, 'the best way to reach me is' could be 'the most reliable way to contact me is.'
coherence
For even better coherence, consider adding a concluding sentence or restating the urgency and request for prompt attention at the end.
task response
Excellent job in providing specific details, like the seat number, brand, and color of the luggage.
task achievement
The letter is clear, concise, and to the point, addressing all necessary details for the situation.
language
Good use of polite language and professionalism throughout the text.

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