Test date 1/12/2018 Some people think that it is more effective for students to study in groups while others believe that it is better for them to study alone. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?

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In the contemporary era, education has become a broad issue in the general public. A large number of

population

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argues that it is more

efficent

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efficient

for

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the pupil

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pupil

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pupils

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to work in groups.

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, it seems to me that learning lonely is more

supervior

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supervisor

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. The following essay will shed light on

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view. First and foremost, people should recognize that studying with friends is not a bad way to improve brainpower. A very important

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to consider

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it is easier to learn from each

others

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when working in groups.

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means that it is a simple and useful way to widen knowledge. To illustrate

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point

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, I would like to mention that learners can broaden their understanding

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discussing

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each

others

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. Another

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I would like to make is that students are able to develop their

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skills.

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is because of the fact that they have to be flexible to interact with their colleague.

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, people can't deny that it is better for a group of

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born

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up solitarily. An essential opinion to consider

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is that

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learing

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learning

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make

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makes

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learner

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learners

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focus more on lessons.

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means that there is nothing

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that can

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interrupt their training. To demonstrate

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perspective, I would like to mention that scholars just concentrate on their studies without friends, idle talk, etc. Another

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I would like to make is that studying

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apply

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one's self is capable of improving

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is because of the fact that

pupil

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pupils

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need to search

academic

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information, find

out

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apply

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solution

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solutions

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revise

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and revise

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the lessons by

himself

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themselves

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, people should have

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consideration on

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problem. From my

obeservation

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observation

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, they should adopt some ways to absorb knowledge

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coherence cohesion

Ensure that the conclusion summarizes your main points and clearly states your final opinion.

coherence cohesion

Try to avoid repetitive sentence structures and use a variety of complex sentences to improve the flow of your essay.

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Provide more specific examples to support your points, which adds depth and strengthens your argument.

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Proofread your essay to correct spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'pupil' should be 'pupils,' 'supervior' should be 'superior,' and 'learing' should be 'learning.'

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Clarify your main points with additional details so that your ideas come across as more comprehensive and convincing.

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Your essay addresses both views and provides reasons to support each side, showing an understanding of the task requirements.

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The use of examples, though needing more detail, demonstrates an effort to support your arguments.

coherence cohesion

You have a logical structure in your essay with clear paragraphs that focus on distinct points.

Your opinion

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If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

281 words

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Test date 1/12/2018 Some people think that it is more effective for students to study in groups while others believe that it is better for them to study alone. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?

Your opinion

In the future all cars, buses and truck will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages

Some people think that men are naturally more competitive than women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?