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The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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There are two
shemes
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schemes
themes
 that depict
the
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Grange
Park
 in
it
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its
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 first year - 1920, and nowadays. At first sight, there are many changes in the
park
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park's
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 structure and features. It seems that in 1920 it was a
garden
 for adults only, for relaxing, music and dates.
Today
 it
became
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has become
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 a
neibourghood
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neighbourhood
center
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centre
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 with car parking,
Amphitheatre
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an Amphitheatre
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 for concerts, and
children's
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a children's
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 play area. I'll start the
discribing
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description
 from the one place which stayed unchanged from the day
park
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the park
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 opened until
today
 - the small and fine rose
garden
 from the left side of
Arnold
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the Arnold
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 Avenue entrance. In 1920 there
are
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were
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 two more rose gardens,
that
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which
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 were moved to the
center
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centre
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 of the
park
, that encompass
today
 both
a
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flowers and seats. We can see that
it's
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its
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 size doubled.
This
 modern rose
garden
 was founded
insted
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instead
 of
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the fontain
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fontain
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fountain
, that
erected
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was erected
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 in the
park
center
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centre
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 in 1920. The cafe took
place
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the place
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 of the rose
garden
 from the right side of the Arnold Avenue entrance, and beside
it
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it,
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 we can't see a pond for water plants
today
 - it's a children's playing ground
instead
, in the corner of the
park
. The
paramaunt
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popular
 new feature in
modern
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the modern
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park
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parks
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 is an amphitheatre for concerts,
that
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which
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 may
conclude
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attract
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 many spectators, which replaced a small stage for
musisianson
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musicians on
musicians
the
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on the
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 left side of the map. The
last
 beautiful place
that is
 not here
today
was
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is
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 the glasshouse. Now it's an awesome waterfall
instead
, that we can see in the right corner of the
park
,
besides
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beside
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 the Eldon
street
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Street
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 entrance.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, garden, today with synonyms.
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