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The chart below gives information about on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010.

The chart below gives information about on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010.
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describe
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 the situation of giving money to charity in Britain in 1990 and 2010, in 5
age
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 groups (18-25, 26-35, 36-50, 50-65 and over 65), in
percents
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. It may be seen brightly, that there were many changes in
status
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 of the donation, and adults from the
age
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 51 and over have started to contribute more money to charity.
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, in
sum
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 it seems that people nowadays donate less money than it was in 1990 The
persentage
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percentage
 of donators in the first
group
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 - of young adults (mostly students and low-skill workers) declined sharply from 17% to 7%
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 the 20 years of observation.
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age
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group
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place
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 and saved it
unchange
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unchanged
. The second
group
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 (26-35) - adults, mostly high-skill workers, parents for toddlers, and children of elders, decreased donations from 32% to 23%.
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 fourth
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. The next one -
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group
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the group
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 of the middle
age
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 (36-50)
that
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apply
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was
on
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 the first
plase
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place
 in 1990 with 42%
falled
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fell
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second
place
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 (which it
devides
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divided
 with
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group
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) with 35%. The first
place
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 today takes the
middle-
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middle-aged
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age
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group
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 (51-65), which increased
it
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 donations slightly from 35% in 1990 to 39% in 2010.
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