The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different

attractions in Brighton.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons

where relevan
The given line graph depicts the data of the proportion of travellers to England who went to 4 different tourist attractions in Brighton. At first glance,
it is clear that
England experienced an upward trend in Pavilion's travellers
as well as
Pier with the exception of
Art
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gallery
and Festival. Notably, in 1980,
Festival's
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the Festival's
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data which is displayed on
chart
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was the most
fascinated
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place for travellers. In 1980,
Pavilion
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the Pavilion
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was similar to
Art
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the Art
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Gallery
, approximately 22% and 21% respectively. The highest figure is Festival with 30% and the lowest one is Pier with 10%. The number of visitors who
traveled
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to
Art
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the Art
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Gallery
witnessed an incredible increase to nearly 40% in 1985 prior to a dramatic decline to reach 8% by 2010.
On the other hand
, Pavilion
where
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had the same traveller numbers in 1980 went up and down to reach 30% by 2010. Especially, Festival where remained stable in the percentage of visitors lost only roughly 3% in the course of 30
year
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and reached 27% in 2010.
Finally
, Pier underwent a modest
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, surpassing
Art
Gallery
in 2005(14%) to be the third-highest which reached over 20% by 2010.

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