The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different ages in the UK who used the Internet every day from 2003-2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different ages in the UK who used the Internet every day from 2003-2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the
rate
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of
internet
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usage by individuals in the UK in various age groups (16-24, 25-44, 45-54, 55-64 and 65+
years
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old) for the period of four
years
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, from 2003 to 2006.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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individuals
within
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between
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16-24
years
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old are the highest proportion of
internet
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user
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users
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compared to the other age groups every
year
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.
In addition
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, the number of
internet
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users
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between the ages of 25-44 and 45-54 showed an upward trend over the period,
while
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for the remaining age groups, the
internet
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user patterns
were fluctuated
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fluctuated
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.
According to
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the data, young
adults
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between 16-24
years
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old
were
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consistently became the highest percentage of
internet
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users
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over the four-
year
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period.
Started
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with 80%
users
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in both 2003 and 2004, the
rate
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reached a peak at 100% in 2005. The proportion experienced a slight decrease,
however
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, in the following
year
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at around 95%. Unlike the
internet
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users
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rate
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in
the
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young
adults
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, it is evident that the
internet
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utilization for mature
adults
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people aged between 25-44
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years
old and 45-54
years
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old consistently increased
year
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by
year
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. Both managed to hit their highest
rate
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in 2006, at 80% altogether.
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, there
were
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also
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an increase of daily
internet
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users
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for the elderly people between 55-64
years
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old and 65+ from the
year
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2003 to 2006, albeit at fluctuated patterns. Similar to the mature
adults
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, elders
also
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reached their highest percentage in 2006, at approximately 50% and 20%, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, internet, years, year, users, adults with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • age group
  • daily internet use
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • upward/downward trend
  • year-wise
  • distribution
  • fluctuation
  • highest/lowest
  • technological advancements
  • social changes
  • targeted marketing
  • internet usage patterns
  • technological familiarity
  • lifestyle
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