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The table presents information about university-level academic staff in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 150 words

The table presents information about university-level academic staff in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 150 words
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Contained in the chart are the data related to academic professionals at university in two periods and the ratio of teachers to students in 2013 in a nation.
Overall
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, the
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 area had the greatest number of academicians,
while
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 Agriculture accounted for the lowest.
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, the amount of students educated by a teacher was highest in the Arts field. On the one hand, most lecturers undertook
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, at 30664 educators in 2005, followed by 23128 members in the Business group.
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, the disparity between the
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 and the Business areas expanded to 8099 in 2013 despite the higher rise rate of the latter.
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, in 2013, there were only four learners per teacher in the
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 field,
whereas
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 an Arts lecturer undertook twelve students. For the remaining categories, most of them saw growth with the exception of Agriculture and Education. For those who
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, there were precisely 1680 of them in 2005,
then
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 declined by 2.8% to just 1633 in 2013.
In addition
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, the most significant drop was found in the Education group by 3.5%.
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, the number of Architecture staff increased most across all groups, from 2380 to 3204.

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