Write a letter to the manager of a restaurant you recently visited. In your letter: - Explain why you chose this restaurant - Describe the problems you faced during your visit - Suggest what the restaurant can do to improve the situation.
I am Saparwadi I have
recent visit
your Replace the word
recently visited
restaurant
with my big family. I would like to tell you my
experience during I Change preposition
about my
visit
your place.
Wrong verb form
visited
Perstly
, I come to your Correct your spelling
Presently
Firstly
restaurant
yesterday at 5 a clock, with my big family. I chose this
place because there are many menus of food and drink that we can eat. Also
the service is very friendly and Add a comma
Also,
quickly
.
during Change the word
quick
we
stay at your Correct pronoun usage
our
restaurant
, I have some problem that you must look in
around your place, like the environment is not clear and Change preposition
apply
than
several Replace the word
then
location
is not good for Change to a plural noun
locations
peple
shit because the table is Correct your spelling
people
bed
, Add an article
a bed
the bed
also
the water is not clean, that
is make
me not Change the verb form
makes
comfertable
for Correct your spelling
comfortable
leave
there a Change the form of the verb
leaving
lot
time.
I think you must Add the preposition
lot of
to
improve the food, you can add types of food. Change the verb form
apply
Also
you must clean the water Add a comma
Also,
perhap
you should large more the environment, and Correct your spelling
perhaps
also
make the security to keep the restaurant
from crime.
I look forward to receiving a message from you
Saparwadi.Submitted by patricius.yohanes on
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coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow of ideas and ensure better organization of paragraphs. Separate them according to each point mentioned (why you chose the restaurant, problems faced, suggestions).
task achievement
Polish the language to avoid grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. This will enhance readability and make your points more persuasive.
task achievement
Be more specific about your suggestions for improvement. This would sound more practical and actionable.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately done, giving a complete structure to the letter.
task achievement
The letter addresses all three points asked in the task, which shows a good attempt to fully answer the task.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.