Write a letter to the manager of a restaurant you recently visited. In your letter: - Explain why you chose this restaurant - Describe the problems you faced during your visit - Suggest what the restaurant can do to improve the situation.

I am Saparwadi I have
recent visit
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recently visited
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your
restaurant
with my big family. I would like to tell you
my
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about my
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experience during I
visit
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visited
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your place.
Perstly
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Presently
Firstly
, I come to your
restaurant
yesterday at 5 a clock, with my big family. I chose
this
place because there are many menus of food and drink that we can eat.
Also
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the service is very friendly and
quickly
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. during
we
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our
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stay at your
restaurant
, I have some problem that you must look
in
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apply
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around your place, like the environment is not clear and
than
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then
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several
location
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locations
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is not good for
peple
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people
shit because the table is
bed
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a bed
the bed
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,
also
the water is not clean,
that
is make
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makes
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me not
comfertable
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comfortable
for
leave
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leaving
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there a
lot
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lot of
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time. I think you must
to
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apply
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improve the food, you can add types of food.
Also
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you must clean the water
perhap
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perhaps
you should large more the environment, and
also
make the security to keep the
restaurant
from crime. I look forward to receiving a message from you Saparwadi.
Submitted by patricius.yohanes on

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coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow of ideas and ensure better organization of paragraphs. Separate them according to each point mentioned (why you chose the restaurant, problems faced, suggestions).
task achievement
Polish the language to avoid grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. This will enhance readability and make your points more persuasive.
task achievement
Be more specific about your suggestions for improvement. This would sound more practical and actionable.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately done, giving a complete structure to the letter.
task achievement
The letter addresses all three points asked in the task, which shows a good attempt to fully answer the task.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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