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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

You would like to rent a car for a holiday. Write to the car rental agency. In your letter •Explain what type of car you would like •Give details of when you would like the car • Request more information about the cost You do NOT need to write any addresses.

#rent #car #holiday #agency #•explain #type #•give #request #information #cost #addresses
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I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that I would like to rent your
car
 tomorrow
,
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 because I will go
to
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on
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 holiday with my big family.
Firstly
, I would like
the
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car
 that large and many
amaunt
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amount
amounts
 of people can
inside
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to
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the
car
. I think the best
car
to
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I m
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I'm
 happy to use name is fortuner because the
car
 is luxurious
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and make
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make
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makes
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 me and my big family absolutely comfortable.
In
addition
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 I will tell you about when I
ready
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am ready
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 to rent your
car
, perhaps I want to go on holiday
to morrow
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tomorrow
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 at five
a
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clock
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o'clock
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, show you
must availible
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the type of
car
 that I want,
morever
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moreover
 I must
waiting
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waiting for
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 my
farends
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friends
 come back to home. For more
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information
imformation
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information
, please tell me how much many that you can ready to rent your
car
, but I hope
that is
 not
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expensive
exspensive
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expensive
 thank you for your attention, looking forward to your positive
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. SAPARWADI.
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suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is generally polite, but the language can be improved with more formal structures. For example, instead of 'big family,' you could say 'large family.'
complete response
Ensure to spellcheck your letter to avoid errors such as 'many amaunt' which should be 'large number' and 'availible' which should be 'available.'
complete response
The letter includes all the necessary details about the type of car, rental period, and request for information about cost.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, such as car type, timing, and additional information, which helps structure the text.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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