You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The line graph describes information about how many England
visitors
travelled to four different destinations in Brighton from 1980 to 2010. The most significant facts to emerge from the graph are that the most popular Brighton attraction the first year was
festival
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the festival
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while
Art
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the Art
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gallery
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Gallery
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had the lowest number of
visitors
at the end
period. Looking at the details, art
Gallery
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Galleries
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and
pavilion
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pavilions
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had similar trends that stood at 22% in 1980.
Next,
art gallery
visitors
increased almost twice times about 39%
then
it fell quickly to 20% in 1990.
Finally
,
this
declined slightly to 9% in 2010
whereas
Pavilion
visitors
reached a high of 49% in 1995, the maximum recorded of all figures from percentages shown on the chart but
this
dropped gradually
15
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to 15
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% in 2010. Moving to Festival tourists, it started around 30% in 1980 and remained stable at 28% in 2010. Meanwhile, Pier destination achieved just 10% in the first year.
Subsequently
, There was a flat from 1985 to 2000. After that,
this
figure rose slowly to 21% in 2010
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