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The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different ages in the UK who used the Internet every day from 2003-2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different ages in the UK who used the Internet every day from 2003-2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar chart gives information about the proportion of adults by
age
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group
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 using the
Internet
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 each day in Britain between 2003 to 2006.
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, it can be seen that teenagers between 16 and 24
years
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 old spent the highest rate of
time
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 on the
internet
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,
while
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 older adults who are 65 and above were the lowest rate. 2006 witnessed the most significant usage. In more detail, 2003 experienced the least common users. Younger between 16-24
age
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group
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 spent 80 per cent of their
time
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 on
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Internet
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 which was the highest proportion. Followed by individuals who were 45-54
years
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 old at 60 per cent. Meanwhile, the elderly
age
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group
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 (55-64) consumed around 30 per cent of their daily
time
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 on
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Internet
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.
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, the
last
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age
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group
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 who were 65 and above did not spend any
time
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 in WWW. In 2004 the rates of using the World Wide Web increased gradually in most of the groups except teenagers who were between 16-24 remained stable as in 2003.
Group
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members
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 of adults between 25-44 and 45-54
years
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 old rose slightly to 60% and around 70% respectively. Older
members
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 used approximately 15%. 2005 had a sharp increase in younger
members
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 which reached the peak point at 100%. Following that individual
age
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 groups between 45-54 recorded around 75%.
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, the
last
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 two generations experienced a decline in the usage rate of almost 28 % and 18% respectively. In the
last
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 period 2006, most of those
age
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members
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 received the highest rates except those who were younger than 25
years
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 old had a drop in usage
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 network
90
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%. The generation between 25 and 54 increased gradually to 80%. The
members
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 of 55-64 increased sharply by about 50%

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group, internet, years, time, members with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • age group
  • daily internet use
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • upward/downward trend
  • year-wise
  • distribution
  • fluctuation
  • highest/lowest
  • technological advancements
  • social changes
  • targeted marketing
  • internet usage patterns
  • technological familiarity
  • lifestyle
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