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The chart and graph below give the information about three categories of workers in Australia and unemployment levels within those categories.

The chart and graph below give the information about three categories of workers in Australia and unemployment levels within those categories.
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The pie chart illustrates the percentage of
workers
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 in
Australia
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 based on their original nations in 2003.
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, the line graph demonstrates the trends of unemployed
laborers
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labourers
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 in
Australia
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according to
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 their place of birth from 1993 to 2003.
Overall
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, the proportion of employees born in
Australia
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 stayed at the highest rate compared to the others.
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, there was a decrease in the proportion of unemployed
workers
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 in the three examined categories, with the data of English-speaking countries still remaining in the first position throughout the years. The percentage of
workers
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 born in
Australia
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 was immense, accounting for three-quarters of the whole chart in 2003.
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, despite
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 huge amount compared to the others, the proportion of unemployed
laborers
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 who were given birth in
Australia
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 witnessed the most dramatic drop, starting at 7% in 1993, after which it experienced a significant downward trend to just above 2% in 2000, and remained at the same rate to the end of the period. 10% and 14% were the figures for the amount of wage earners coming from English and non-English nations in 2003. Because of the low figure for
workers
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, their unemployment rate was much lower compared to native
workers
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, which was at approximately 4% in the first year, followed by a gradual drop to 2% and just above 1% respectively after a decade.
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