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The graph below shows the percentage of people by age group visiting the cinema at least once per month in one particular country between 1978 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of people by age group visiting the cinema at least once per month in one particular country between 1978 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the proportion of
people
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 who go to the cinema more than once per month in a country in a 30-year period. The percentage of
people
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 aged between 14 and 24 took the leading position with over 90% in 1978, which was a slight downward trend to 90% in 2008. It was flowed by the group of age 25-34 at 80%, after experiencing a significant drop from 1978 to 1988, the data of that reached the bottom at 60%.
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, after the bottom, the proportion rocketed to 80% in 1998 and remained stable
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there in the
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 10 years.
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, the figures for
people
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 between 35 and 49 and over 50 were seen
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 same trend in
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 30 years. They stayed third and fourth with 60% and 40% separately at the beginning, after a fluctuation, even though the data of them went up to about 68% and more than 50% separately, their position still not changed. Around 1993, the percentage of citizens aged 35-49 was equal to that of age 25-34 at approximately 65%.
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, in the three decades, the statistics for
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 who went to the cinema more than once per month has dropped in the group aged 14-34, and saw an upward trend in the group aged over 35.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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