The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Here is the extracted text from the image: The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Number of shop closures and openings 2011–2018 [Line Chart with the following data points] Closures: 2011: 6,000 2012: 6,500 2013: 7,000 2014: 6,000 2015: 4,500 2016: 500 2017: 5,000 2018: 5,000 Openings: 2011: 8,500 2012: 4,000 2013: 4,000 2014: 5,000 2015: 4,000 2016: 4,000 2017: 4,000 2018: 3,000

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.  Here is the extracted text from the image:   The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.  Number of shop closures and openings 2011–2018 [Line Chart with the following data points] Closures: 2011: 6,000 2012: 6,500 2013: 7,000 2014: 6,000 2015: 4,500 2016: 500 2017: 5,000 2018: 5,000 Openings: 2011: 8,500 2012: 4,000 2013: 4,000 2014: 5,000 2015: 4,000 2016: 4,000 2017: 4,000 2018: 3,000
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The given line chart indicates the
number
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of shop closures and openings in one country during 2011 and 2018.
Overall
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, the
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of shop openings experienced a dramatic drop in 2012
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showed a significant increase in 2014.
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, the
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of closed shops showed a noticeable downward trend in 2015
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it fluctuated slightly in different years. The
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of new shops reached its
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peak in 2011
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underwent a rapid decrease from 8500 to 4000,
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remained unchanged for 3 years.
At the end
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of the period, the
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consistently fell again, ending at 3000. In comparison with the opening shops'
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, the closures
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showed slight fluctuations between 2011 and 2014. A significant change appeared in 2015; it dropped sharply and reached its lowest
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at around 500, but jumped suddenly to over 5000 within a year. The figures remained stable
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of the period.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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