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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it difficut to work. Write a letter to the accomodation officer at the college. in your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accomodation you would prefer.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am a Nursing student in my final year of study in the college, and
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leave
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 in one of the college rooms precisely
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 206 in the Tayfor building. I used to
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 with my former
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, who recently graduated so she moved out, she was so nice and thoughtful to live with, and
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 really miss her. Fast forward
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 was given a new
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 and
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 when all the
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 started, making it difficult for me to work. My new
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room
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roommate
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 moved in not quite long ago and she has been a nuisance from the day she arrived. First of
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 since
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 have my lecteurs in the morning
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 come home and rest for so
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 before I start to work, But during that time thats when my
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roommate
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 decides to
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 her video games or
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 throw parties from that time until midnight,
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 it makes it difficult for me to work. I have tried several times to talk to her but she seems to not give me
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. I would want to be moved to a new
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 since my exams are fast approaching and would need all the concentration to learn for my exams. I
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 mind having a
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roommate
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 who is more
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considerate
 and would not give me much trouble. I hope to hear from you soon . Thank you. Yours Sincerely, Keziah Boye

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task achievement
Try to proofread your work to catch small errors like 'would want' instead of 'would like' and 'lecteurs' which should be 'lectures'.
coherence cohesion
Adding transitions like 'Additionally' or 'Furthermore' can enhance the logical structure and flow.
coherence cohesion
The letter appropriately addresses the accommodation officer and includes a polite closing.
task achievement
You have clearly described the situation and explained why it is difficult for you to work, which fulfills the task requirements well.
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