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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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As we can see on the graph of the production levels of the main kinds of
fuel
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 in the UK between 1981 and 2000, the most used
fuel
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 during
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 period of time was petroleum. The
energy
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units
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 for
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 kind of
fuel
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variated
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 between 90 and 140. In comparison, values of the
energy
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units
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 of two other fuels - coal and natural
gas
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, variated between 30 to 80 for coal and 40 to 100 for natural
gas
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. Another information we can get from
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 graph is that the
usage
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 of these three
fuel
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 kinds changed drastically during the period. Especially for coal and natural
gas
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.
At
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 the year of 1981 natural
gas
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 was
least
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the least
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 used
fuel
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 with the
energy
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units
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 at about 40. But in 1991 its
usage
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 started to
raise
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 and became more popular than coal. The use of coal at the beginning of
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 timeline was about 80
units
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, but
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 in 1984 a sudden drop
happend
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happened
. After
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 there was a slight increase in its
usage
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 but it has never come back to the
initail
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initial
 value. Shortly before a decrease in coal
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 in 1991 happened, there
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 was
a
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 increase in petroleum
energy
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units
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 values.
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 probably was the reason for a sudden drop in coal production.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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