The chart below show the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below show the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The bar chart and table represent the comparison and trends of an identified nation's
export
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exports
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in five different categories during 2015 and 2016, indicated as billions
US
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of US
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dollars and percentages respectively.
Overall
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, it can be clearly observed that the
earning
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earnings
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received from petroleum products
was
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the highest,
while
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that of
textiles
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was the
least
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lowest
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in both years.
However
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, it is interesting to note that the changes in
value
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the value
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of
textiles
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in a year skyrocketed the most
comparing
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compared
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with
others
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other
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exported goods.
To begin
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with, in 2015, at
slighly
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slightly
above $60
billion
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the
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apply
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petroleum products had the greatest profits from distributing goods internationally among the other four, followed by
the
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engineered goods, agricultural products and
textiles
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, at $58
billion
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, at $32
billion
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, and at $26
billion
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,respectively. In 2016, the revenues
gain
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from these aforementioned categories
was
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were
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surpassed except
gems
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for gems
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and
jewelly
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jewellery
that
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which
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had fewer than its previous
earning
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earnings
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about $3
billion
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. In regards
with
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to
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, the trends of the changes
of
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in
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the profits
could
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can
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be clearly seen
on
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in
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the table, at 15.24%
Textiles
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make the largest gap
of
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in
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earnings which was approximately 5
time
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times
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bigger than the petroleum
product
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products
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words textiles, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • categories
  • value
  • percentage change
  • petroleum products
  • engineered goods
  • gems and jewelry
  • agricultural products
  • textiles
  • year-on-year comparison
  • growth
  • decline
  • analysis
  • implications
  • economic impact
  • trade
  • international market
  • statistical data
  • increase
  • decrease
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