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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution prob- lems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement? What other measures do you think might be effective?

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In
this
 contemporary era, the highest cost of petrol will be the best choice
of
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 solve growing traffic and
pollution
prob- lems
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problems
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. I strongly agree with
this
 statement. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the reasons
about
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why is it the best way
for increasing
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to increase
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 the
price
 of petrol and the other measures that might be effective.
Firstly
, using transport will reduce, when the
price
 of fuel is increasing.
Thus
,
this
 reasoning will affect
of
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the traffic jam.
As a result
,
this
 will help to save
environment
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the environment
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 from most
of
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pollution
 problems.
According to
the
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 new survey
in
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 Australian University," Increasing the
price
 of fuel is a main reason that will help global from
pollution
 problems".
Secondly
, saving the income of
individual
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an individual
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 is a second reason. Most families will save money and they will use transportation when they need only.
Thus
,
this
reasiong
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reading
reasoning
reason
 will be more effective on the economic side. In conclusion, there is no doubt that increasing the
price
 of
pertrol
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petrol
 will
effect
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affect
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 on
economic
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 and
pollution
. I believe that it will be more
benefiting
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beneficial
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on
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in
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 saving
environment
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the environment
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 .
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task achievement
Your essay does a good job of addressing the task, but it needs a bit more depth and detail. Develop each point more thoroughly by providing more examples or discussing the implications in greater length.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical flow of your essay. While the structure is present, some ideas lack clear connections. Ensure that each paragraph leads smoothly to the next and that transitions between ideas are more coherent.
coherence cohesion
Your essay includes both an introduction and a conclusion, which provides a clear structure to your argument.
task achievement
You make an effort to include supporting points for your argument, such as the survey from the Australian university and the impact on economic savings.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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