Developing countries require help offered by international organization to ensure healthy and sustainable development. Some people think that financial aids is important. Other believe that practical aid and advice is more important. Discuss both these views and give youw own opinion.
Nowadays, people who live in developing countries begin to help others in different
ways
. Those countries provide support
to increase plans
through international organizations.The most common ways
is
directly giving others financial aid or providing practical advice. Both solutions benefit a lot, personally, I tend to offer realistic Change the verb form
are
support
.
Financial support
is the most convenient way to help other individuals. With this
support
, the organization can easily use the budget to improve certain plans
which is
in progress. Change the verb form
are
However
, it has its advantages and disadvantages, the funder has no idea whether the fund is using properly. There is a chance that a large amount of money might be investing
in another place. Wrong verb form
invested
For example
, news often reports that some politicians bribe for government increase plans
, which were intended to enhance the living standards of residences, such
as building a society apartment or a transportation system.
While
practical assistance does not have such
questions as financial support
, certain items can only be used in the improvement plans
, such
as material or food. Therefore
, more and more people prefer to give their hand in a realistic way, in order to avoid graft in abundant cash flows. Whereas
, the only problem in provide
certain stuff is the Change the verb form
providing
highly
repetition of Change the adverb
high
same
products, which leads to the shortcuts of necessary demands. Correct article usage
the same
For instance
, people might need rice instead
of clothes, however
, others keep donating clothes or shoes. In this
way, those kinds of behaviors
can not help.
In conclusion, whether financial aid or practical aid all bring in great results in developing countries. As long as the provider is willing to give help, both Change the spelling
behaviours
ways
are good ways
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