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The table below shows the cinema viewing figures for films by country, in millions.

The table below shows the cinema viewing figures for films by country, in millions.
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The table provides information about the cinema viewing data
according to
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 their genre in four countries(in
millions
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).
Overall
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, it is remarkable that India has the highest
number
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 of
viewrs
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viewers
views
 in total in three types of films, except for horror. In opposite, other countries had
similar
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 amount of
viewrs
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viewers
views
 in each genre of film. The chart is dominated by India with 24.5 viewers in total, and it has the greatest
number
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 in 2 sections: action and romance, with 8
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millions
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 and 7.5
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 respectively. Ireland was the second in the
number
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 of visitors
of
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 cinema, with 23.3
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millions
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 in total.
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,
this
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 country has the highest amount of 6.4
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. The third and the fourth countries
has
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the
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quite the same amount for action, romance and comedy. But the Japanese made up the lowest
number
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 in horror
whereas
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 the New
Zealands
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Zealand
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 the second most viewers.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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