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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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the line graph and table provide information about
hours
 of sunlight and
temperature
 per calendar year over 3 major
cities
 which are
London
, New
York
, Sydney
overall
, it is given that New
York
 has the most sunny
hours
between
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among
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 the 3 other
cities
 reaching 2535
hours
 which is more than
the
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double
of
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London
 and 38
hours
 more than Sydney as we can see the city of Sydney starts the year
by
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with
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 its peak
temperature
 reaching roughly 26
degrees
,
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 before start dropping in
march
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March
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reaching
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and reaching
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 its lowest
temperature
 of 16
degrees
 in mid
july
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July
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 as of
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January
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january
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January
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 both
cities
 of
London
 and New
York
experience
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experienced
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 low
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temperatures
tempratures
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temperatures
while
 dropping to 9
degrees
 for
London
 and 6
degrees
 for New
York
nevertheless
, both
cities
 experience a significant rise in temperatures afterwards reaching their top temperatures
at
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in
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Change the capitalization
July
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july
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July
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where
Correct word choice
when
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London
 see
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
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18
degrees
whereas
 New
York
 experience a
temperature
 of 29
degrees
 before start dropping
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, temperature, cities, london, york, degrees with synonyms.
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