The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
the line graph and table provide information about
hours
of sunlight and
temperature
per calendar year over 3 major
cities
which are
London
, New
York
, Sydney
overall
, it is given that New
York
has the most sunny
hours
between
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among
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the 3 other
cities
reaching 2535
hours
which is more than
the
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double
of
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London
and 38
hours
more than Sydney as we can see the city of Sydney starts the year
by
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with
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its peak
temperature
reaching roughly 26
degrees
,
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before start dropping in
march
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March
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reaching
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and reaching
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its lowest
temperature
of 16
degrees
in mid
july
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July
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as of
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January
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january
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January
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both
cities
of
London
and New
York
experience
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low
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temperatures
tempratures
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temperatures
while
dropping to 9
degrees
for
London
and 6
degrees
for New
York
nevertheless
, both
cities
experience a significant rise in temperatures afterwards reaching their top temperatures
at
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in
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July
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july
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July
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where
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when
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London
see
a
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18
degrees
whereas
New
York
experience a
temperature
of 29
degrees
before start dropping
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, temperature, cities, london, york, degrees with synonyms.
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