The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart shows the
amount
of crimes in the Change the quantifier
number
UK
, broken down by the ages
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age
while
the pie chart illustrates the types of crime
in the UK
for the last
year. It clearly
seen that people who Add a missing verb
is clearly
age
between 16 and 24 are the most criminal and violent Correct your spelling
are
crime
is the biggest crime
in the UK
.
There is nothing
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no
crime
rate committed by ages
0 to 8 years and slightly rose 5% by ages
12, moreover
extremely rose to 70%, 80% and 60% by the ages
16, 20 and 24 respectively. Additionally
, It significanlly
decreased to 20% by Correct your spelling
significantly
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the ages
ages
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age
28
years and it slightly Change preposition
of 28
continuous
decreased to 10% by the Change the word
continuously
ages
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age
60
years.
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of 60
On the other hand
, violent crime
is the most types
by Fix the agreement mistake
type
neatly
half of the population Correct your spelling
nearly
while
public order crime
became the least types
of Fix the agreement mistake
type
crime
in the UK
for the las
year by 9%. And the middle drug and property Correct your spelling
last
crime
has a similiar
amount Correct your spelling
similar
by
22% and 23%.
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of
Overall
, a lot of crime
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crimes
committed
starting Add a missing verb
are committed
by
the Change preposition
at
ages
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age
12
, Change preposition
of 12
while
ages
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the ages
among
12-24 Change preposition
apply
is
the most, and Change the verb form
are
also
there are
a lot of type Change the verb form
is
crime
.Change preposition
of crime
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