The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart shows the
amount
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number
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of crimes in the
UK
, broken down by the
ages
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age
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,
while
the pie chart illustrates the types of
crime
in the
UK
for the
last
year. It
clearly
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is clearly
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seen that people who
age
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are
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between 16 and 24 are the most criminal and violent
crime
is the biggest
crime
in the
UK
. There is
nothing
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crime
rate committed by
ages
0 to 8 years and slightly rose 5% by
ages
12,
moreover
extremely rose to 70%, 80% and 60% by the
ages
16, 20 and 24 respectively.
Additionally
, It
significanlly
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significantly
decreased to 20% by
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the ages
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ages
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age
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28
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of 28
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years and it slightly
continuous
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decreased to 10% by the
ages
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age
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60
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of 60
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years.
On the other hand
, violent
crime
is the most
types
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type
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by
neatly
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nearly
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half of the population
while
public order
crime
became the least
types
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type
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of
crime
in the
UK
for the
las
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last
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year by 9%. And the middle drug and property
crime
has a
similiar
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similar
amount
by
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of
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22% and 23%.
Overall
, a lot of
crime
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crimes
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committed
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are committed
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starting
by
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at
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the
ages
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age
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12
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of 12
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,
while
ages
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the ages
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among
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apply
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12-24
is
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are
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the most, and
also
there
are
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is
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a lot of type
crime
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of crime
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, ages, crime with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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