You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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This
graph chart depicts the quantity of foreign tourists in Englans
, who visited Brighton attractions like the Art Gallery, the Pavilion, the Correct your spelling
England
Pier
, and the Festival from 1980 to 2010. At first
sight
it seems the most popular entertainment for today is the Add a comma
sight,
Pier
. Those lines can be divided into two groups. The first
which has the decline of visitor's
percentage Change noun form
visitor
due to
the period (the Festival and the Art Galery
), and the second with the increase Correct your spelling
Gallery
of
the visitor's amount (the Change preposition
in
Pier
and the Pavilion).
First
and foremost, in the first
group
the Add a comma
group,
Pier
has the higher
rise Correct word choice
highest
of
Change preposition
in
the
Correct article usage
apply
visitor's quantity
, from 10% in 1980 to 22% in 2010 with Change noun form
visitors
lightly
fluctuations Change the adverb
light
due to
the period (peak of 15 % in 1985 and falling to 9% in 1990). The Pavilion starts
the period of observation Wrong verb form
started
from
24% in 1980, Change preposition
with
then
the amount
of people increased gradually to the apex of 49% in 1995Change the quantifier
number
,
and went down slowly to 31% in 2010.
Remove the comma
apply
Furthermore
, in the second group, the Art Galary
started from 21% in 1980, achieved Correct your spelling
Gallery
the
peak of 38% in 1985, after Correct article usage
a
that
it was Add a comma
that,
the
sharp falling to 20% of visitors. And from 1990 to 2010 it Correct article usage
apply
droped
slowly to 9%. The Correct your spelling
dropped
last
one from the
attraction is the Festival, Correct article usage
apply
that
started with 30% of Correct pronoun usage
which
a
Correct article usage
apply
partisipants
in 1980, and Correct your spelling
participant
participants
remain
almost stable Correct subject-verb agreement
remains
due to
the
30 years of observation with the Correct article usage
apply
lightly
Change the word
light
decreas
to 27% in 2010.Correct your spelling
decrease
decreased
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pier, first with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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